I’d thank to thank my peer reviewer for their feedback. I only had one peer review and many of their comments were about my writing style. I will improve my grammar and sentence phrasing to make it easy to read. Another comment they had was to explain key words like Fair Trade. Fair Trade is a bit complicated, so I will not explain Fair Trade in its entirety, but I will include a wiki-link to its page. Overall, I will improve the readability of my section of the article and include the wiki-links to any important words or organizations. Thank you peer reviewer!
Comments on my Peer Review Assessment
Although I only received one peer review edit, the opinion was quite helpful. Joseph stated that my plans were very descriptive. He also agreed with me that there were a few examples of plagiarism already on the page and that I should delete those paragraphs or cite them. Joseph also made an important point that since gentrification is such a controversial topic, I should be careful to not write with a bias when adding my section. I will definitely keep this in mind when writing my paragraph. Thank you again Joseph for taking the time to review my article.
(p.s enjoy this picture of a beautiful mural located in Pilsen, Chicago. (the area I am writing my wiki article about!))
Peer Reviewer Suggestions!
First, I want to thank my peer reviewer! I really appreciate you taking the time to read my ideas on improving the article and giving me feedback for it. The person who reviewed my ideas of improvement agreed that adding to how society impacts the way women dress and the textiles they produce is important to add. I think by doing this I can address the different meanings behind the patterns and embroideries of certain clothing pieces such as the huipil (only briefly mentioned in the article) as my peer reviewer suggested. While brainstorming of things to add to the article, I did feel like I had hit a sort of roadblock of things to add which is why I appreciate the suggestion to add to the introduction/overview section of the article. Looking back at the article now, I completely agree. The overview section is incredibly underdeveloped in this article and I think I can add a lot to it. I can use this section to provide historical context and introduce the audience to evidence that’ll help them answer the question of “Why does this article even matter?”. Lastly, thank you so much to my peer reviewer for reminding me of the picture idea! You’re so right, I do actually have a hooded jacket that I brought back from Latin America that would work well with this project and the article. This suggestion also reminded me of a lot of other things I brought back that could possibly work in these projects! I’m going to try to get someone from home to text me a picture of them!
Peer Review Suggestions
The additions that I will make to my Wikipedia article are central around the success of the brand, Havaianas. As a result, both of my peer reviewers suggested that it may be difficult to remain neutral when discussing the impact of this brand because I do not want to try to persuade readers for why the brand is so successful. Essentially, I need to show the methods and techniques that were utilized by the brand from a marketing perspective. It was recommended that I gather as many statistics as I can and try to provide charts and tables that further demonstrate the brand’s impact on the world. I do not know whether it will be feasible to add charts and graphs since I do not own the rights to them, but I can use the information supplied by the graphs and cite it as a source. This brings me to the next point that both of my peer reviewers made, which is to cite heavily. More citations yield greater credibility. Additionally, both of my peer reviewers agreed with me that there is an evident content gap in my article and my plan will improve it substantially. However, I was also asked about how I plan to place my research in the article, which provoked me to think about the organizational structure that I will incorporate into my article and the different sections that I will name. All of their suggestions were really beneficial and have caused me to think about my additions in multiple ways. Thanks peer reviewers!
Proposed Revisions
First, Thank you to People who commented on my talk page.
They said that since the topic is very interesting and less known, I should add some information why the monks chose to renovate La Cathedral. Thus, I will incorporate the reason for the renovation in my talk page. And in terms of the sequencing the sections, I will fix that in order to fit the flow of the passage. And I will paraphrase the direct quote that I have used in order to prevent the plagiarism. However, speaking of the sources for the article, It is difficult to find more sources for the article since the topic is indeed a narrowly focused topic and even though it’s been presented in some of the books or journals, still, only a small number of words have been given for the description of La Catedral. Most resources that I could find is through the periodicals. In addition, I intend to add a section that mainly addresses how people have dug deep inside the prison to find the hidden money Pablo Escobar has buried underground. It would be an interesting fact to add to the passage.
Wikipedia Revisions
The people who commented on my Wikipedia plans suggested that I add pictures and replace bad sources. They also warned me to remain unbiased because my topic can quickly become biased. As far as pictures go, I will look for good pictures of my topic but I am not sure that they will be available. I will try to at least incorporate a picture of the Autodefensa symbol which is a white dove. In terms of replacing bad sources, I will see what kind of overlap my sources have with the bad ones. If there is overlap I will absolutely replace those sources with better ones. If there is no overlap, I will do some research however it can be hard to find good information on my topic. It seems like the person who wrote my article originally had a lot of knowledge of Autodefensas groups in Mexico before they did any research and just tried to find a few sources to back up what they knew. Hopefully I will be able to find better ones that serve the same purpose. Finally, I will be sure to remain unbiased. This will be hard considering the topic however I think it will be doable as long as I stick to factual information and am very careful with my word choice. For example I will say that some Autodefensas groups began to sell drugs to finance their organization however I will not compare this to cartel activity even though it is similar. If I made that comparison I may be forcing my own conclusions on my readers which is not allowed on Wikipedia. I got a lot of good feedback so now I just have to get started!
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Remixing Reggaeton: Enter The Hurbans
In the United States, Latinos were stereotyped as “hypersexual party people”. They were seen as “hot tamales” for the way citizens of the United States perceived their music videos and themes in their songs. However, Rivera-Rideau’s argues that if these Latino songwriters and performers could “pass” as being white, they had a chance at being assimilated into the mainstream music industry of the United States. Rivera—Rideau argues, while illustrating through the usage of a spectrum, that these Latino music artists are racialized, essentially being labeled, categorized and compared relative to White Americans and African Americans, to promote the style of music throughout the industry.
The chapter mentions that Reggaetón does have many similarities to music produced by Black Americans, however, when the genre was introduced to the United States it was labeled as “Hurban” or “Hispanic Urban” to primarily attract the Latino Americans that resided in the states to the style of music. By labeling the genre “Hurban” the genre had the opportunity to flourish in the United States because it was initially targeted to a community that could more easily relate to the style and its themes. I’m sure this was a marking ploy created so that once the music became popular in highly concentrated latino regions of the U.S., the musical genre would spread to other cultures and regions ultimately making more money while appearing to assimilate the culture. Throughout the chapter, I noticed that it seemed that Rivera—Rideau argued in the United States we tend to group the latino genre differently depending on how we care to view the culture in a specific circumstance. Rivera—Rideau states that “this Hurban category linked Latinidad and blackness via stereotypes associated with poor, urban black and Latino communities while simultaneously maintaining the rigid separation between the two categories in the U.S. racial lexicon;” this sentiment ultimately shows that we acknowledge the stereotypes that say these minorities belong to a lower class but we should keep them separate probably to appeal to the Latino community.
Homework 10/23/207
Rivera Rideau argues that once Reggeton hit the mainstream media in the US around the 2000s, the media chose to systematically racialize Latinos and African Americans. Rideau undergoes intense examination of the media coverage during this period and finds that the media portrays Latinos and African Americans with stereotypes yet keeping the two races separated from each other although the creators of the music are closely linked. The way the media chose to portray the two groups created a separation of the races that had not been present in the original Latin environments. The article sheds light on the issues of race, gender, and class and how they shape the evolution of reggeton. Specifically, the aspect of colorism plays a role in the success of reggeton artists. Examples show how lighter skinned Latinos or the ‘not quite black’ Latinos achieved more success and recognition when their music was brought to the US mainstream media. Examples of this were shown with Daddy Yankee, Enrique Iglesias and Shakira. Gender also played a role in the music industry for the artists. The article describes the success of multiple male artists but vaguely mentions female artists. It seems that gender and race play a huge role in the success of these artists. On another note, reggaton music often sexualizes women and creates degradation of women. The article also describes how reggaton’s music reflects the social class of the artists. The music has become associated with low income and impoverished neighborhoods. This leads to the stereotypes that these dynamics lead to criminal activity. This leads to the continued negative views of minority races. It is obvious that the author has an angry tone when writing the article as he discusses the negative effects of the stereotypes of reggaton music.
Reggaeton Article: “Enter the Hurbans”
In Petra R. Rivera-Rideau’s article, Enter the Hurbans, the background of Reggaeton and its rise in US culture are discussed. In the article, Rivera-Rideau makes the clear distinction between the Reggaeton that is known throughout Latin America and what Reggaeton has been adapted into in the US: a racial controversy promoting stereotypes, the success of lighter-skinned artists, and the appropriation of cultures for the purpose of entertaining US residents. Additionally, the media in the US hypersexualizes reggaeton portraying this as the norm throughout Latin America.
Given that the roots of the genre stem from primarily Afro-Puerto Rican ghettos, it is expected that the genre would be compared to hip-hop because of its roots in lower-class, African-American neighborhoods. As far as race, class and gender affecting how reggaeton changes in the future, I believe minor changes will result from these issues in Latin America. However, in the US, the future of the genre will be almost entirely shaped by money and race, just the same as rap music. Although reggaeton artists in Latin America are mostly men, I believe the rise of reggaeton in the US will bring opportunities to many artists, male and female.
The few reggaeton hits that were popular in the US resulted in hundreds of millions of plays and dollars of revenue. Given this history, anyone in the music industry in the US who has had interest in reggaeton in the past is now likely trying to make the next “Despacito.” This money-fueled attack on traditional reggaeton could result in the formation of a new genre, or even the US’s takeover of the genre worldwide. While reggaeton stands in its current state as hope for US culture to adapt a new genre into its mainstream music scene, the destruction of its latin influence could prove to be quite damaging to reggaeton artists, as their money and genre is stolen for good business.